Sindra

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Spells for summoners are specific to each summon.

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So... You're actually 1 slot over.

3 Summons
2 Spells

So something has to be held off...

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Persona's can't be killed and will simply disintegrate when defeated. They then wait in their dimension to heal, and are then once again available to be summoned.

I have no idea why I missed that...

But you made an ability without labeling it so... and if the summon is "Killed" or "destroyed" they can't be used for the rest of the thread. Only if you force them to be "unsummoned" will they recover HP and return... like Pokemon... as this is the same system here.

I thought that was implied, but I'll specify that, thanks. bump.

Rakunda: Whenever Orpheus has his lyre in his possession he can activate "Rakunda" by strumming on it. An ability that can only be used once per post, it allows him to deal twice as much damage against weak armor and D-Rank defensive abilities.

No matter how I look at this... it looks like a buff.. and doing x2... no matter how you word it, it a spell at least.

On top of that... you have a sound based weapon, which looks like an autohit in every form..

Easiest way (and most tedious...) is to make the weapons in an app and do it that way. As I see it, you have one insanely strong summon who plays a instrument do do double damage to destroy all defenses in the thread.

Sorry if I seem harsh... Life.. and kinda got used to really directing jutsu for Naruto forums.

My bad.

bhiuon

Alright, hopefully this is the last check I gotta do... cuz it looks good.

First, i would suggest putting the following as an "ability"

Persona's can't be killed and will simply disintegrate when defeated. They then wait in their dimension to heal, and are then once again available to be summoned in another thread.

it's just floating there.

In addition, add in, as another ability that you can cancel, or "return" or "desummon" your Personas. This will be labeled as an ability, but it will not count towards your max.

As for the weapons of your summons, add in:

- It's durable, it will break after 2 D Rank Spell hits (or one C rank Spell) or 3 weak weapon hits (or 1 strong hit)

As seen on a very special app: http://www.unknownlandsrp.com/t154-sword-of-lucivoulus
(So some variation of that.)

As for the abilities of Magatsu-Izanagi, remove it. It's just a method of how you're using the weapon. It would deal that damage regardless, because of the summon's rank.

On Zio, add in the basics... like if it hits rock it's cancelled and all of that. You can look at my own magic at my Lightning Jutsu to see what I mean.

As for the second persona..

Orpheus is elementally weak to lightning, due to the fact that he is made of metal, and highly conductive. It deals twice the amount of damage it would normally do to him.

Your element is Fire... but you're made of steel? So your summon is really Fire/Metal. Soo... You might want to re thing that I guess?

(Half awake. Meeeh.)

BUt that's it. The spells look good. Clarify if you want, or don't. Regardless you follow like.. "Common Sense" (Which I hope people still have...) which has been noted. It just seems a bit vague, even if it's straight forward

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tl;dr

Label thing as ability.
Make ability.
Clarify weapon
Clarify weakness of the elements of your spell (Cus there are stupid people and trolls out there.)
And your second persona is actually FIRE/METAL, if you so choose that way. (EASY FIX: Armor. Not made of it... just wear it.)

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